IELTS Discussion Essay Sample 4 - Family and Children
In this post, we will look at a discussion essay example from the IELTS writing task 2 test. Students often ask if the questions are repeated year after year and the answer is no, but the topics are. There are so many questions written each year, you may find your practice answering various questions on different topics. For example, you could write essays to answer questions about education or the environment, which benefits you because you learn vocabulary associated with those topics and develop ideas that can help you in your writing test.
Practising writing IELTS task 2 essays on a range of topics is a great way to learn new vocabulary for those topics, but also to practice your essay structures. You begin to develop your ideas around those topics, thinking of examples and giving your opinions.
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Many people choose to ask their parents to assist them in taking care of their sons and daughters while others think that they need to nurture their own offspring. This essay believes that parents and grandparents should work together to raise their family. Firstly, this essay will discuss the benefits of raising the children with their grandparents and secondly, the advantages of nurturing your own child.
On the one hand, parents nowadays find it difficult in balancing the time between work and taking care of their families. They seek the help of the grandparents to assist them in taking care of the kids because they need to work hard in order to provide the monetary needs of their family. This also can boost the confidence and give energy to the grandparents since they know that they are still needed, even if they are old. For instance, an article in the Manila Bulletin in 2017 revealed that grandparents are more likely to live longer while raising their grandchildren versus grandparents who live alone.
On the other hand, most parents would want to raise their children by themselves. They want to be there to assist their child in every step of the way for they believe that nurturing is very important in order to raise a responsible individual. This practice can also strengthen the ties between family members, for they know that they will support each other no matter what. Children raised by their parents are more likely to become more caring and have a positive outlook on life. For example, a study by the Child Psychology of the Philippines in 2015 revealed that children raised by their parents are happier and healthier versus children raised by nannies.
In my opinion, I believe that parents should raise their children with the help of their grandparents. They need to work together, for bringing up a child is a difficult job and they need each other in order to withstand the hindrances and problems that they can encounter. Children need a strong support system to help them conquer fears and reach their aspirations. To know that there are a lot of people who support and love you is a good weapon to survive the demanding world. For example, in my own experience, I spent my childhood with both of my parents and grandparents and this made me a better person because I know that there will always be people who will love and accept me no matter what.
In conclusion, parents and grandparents should help one another in raising a child. They need the love, care and support in order to help mould them into a better and wiser individual someday.
(Word count - 447 / Band score 8)
- Task Achievement - The essay provides an answer to the question asked, supported by relevant examples.
- Coherence and Cohesion - The answer has been divided into clear logical paragraphs and each main body paragraph only has one main idea. There are cohesive links between the main body paragraphs.
- Lexical Resource - There is evidence of a wide range of vocabulary, with no errors in the text.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy - The answer has no grammatical errors. The sentences have a wide range of structures.
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