IELTS Cause/Effect Essay Sample 2 - Health
In this post, we will look at a cause/effect essay example from the IELTS writing task 2 test. Students often ask if the questions are repeated year after year and the answer is no, but the topics are. There are so many questions written each year, you may find your practice answering various questions on different topics. For example, you could write essays to answer questions about education or the environment, which benefits you because you learn vocabulary associated with those topics and develop ideas that can help you in your writing test.
Practising writing IELTS task 2 essays on a range of topics is a great way to learn new vocabulary for those topics, but also to practice your essay structures. You begin to develop your ideas around those topics, thinking of examples and giving your opinions.
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Physicians advise their older patients to conduct physical workouts frequently but many of them do not follow the guidance given. Firstly, this essay will discuss the main cause of the problem and secondly will give suggestions on how to inspire them to have more regular activity.
On the one hand, the main cause of older people not completing enough exercise is that they are often suffering from various aches and pains within their body. Older people possibly associate exercise with strenuous activity, whereas tailored programs for their age group are more likely to be given. Having a weaker body can also contribute to the root of the problem because they are afraid they might injure themselves while doing certain movements. For example, DOH Philippines reported in 2017, that 7 out of 10 geriatric causes of hospitalizations are because of accidents involving strenuous activities.
On the other hand, proper instruction from experienced instructors could inspire older people to exercise. Wushu and Zumba gold are now famous amongst old people because they offer light movements to music and are fun group activities. By attending group classes with friends this can also encourage them to see it as more of a social meeting. For instance, a survey conducted by Workout magazine reported in 2016 that 75% of women aged 60+ joined Zumba gold classes instead of having a one to one personal trainer.
In conclusion, older people should be encouraged to move their bodies, with light, fun and group exercises. Many of them may feel inspired to follow a regular fitness program with encouragement from peers.
(Word count - 263 / Band score 8)
- Task Achievement - The essay provides an answer to the question asked, supported by relevant examples.
- Coherence and Cohesion - The answer has been divided into clear logical paragraphs and each main body paragraph only has one main idea. There are cohesive links between the main body paragraphs.
- Lexical Resource - There is evidence of a wide range of vocabulary, with no errors in the text.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy - The answer has no grammatical errors. The sentences have a wide range of structures.
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