In this post, we will look at a discussion essay example from the IELTS writing task 2 test. Students often ask if the questions are repeated year after year and the answer is no, but the topics are. There are so many questions written each year, you may find your practice answering various questions on different topics. For example, you could write essays to answer questions about education or the environment, which benefits you because you learn vocabulary associated with those topics and develop ideas that can help you in your writing test.
Practising writing IELTS task 2 essays on a range of topics is a great way to learn new vocabulary for those topics, but also to practice your essay structures. You begin to develop your ideas around those topics, thinking of examples and giving your opinions.
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In various nations, there are workers who bring in huge amounts of money. Certain people believe that this benefits their republic, while others consider that government authorities ought to regulate the wages of all employees. I believe that the government should not restrain the number of earnings for an individual, as this is the product of hard work. Firstly, this essay will discuss the benefits of high earners residing in a country and secondly the main advantage of taxing high earners.
One the one hand, those people who earn extremely high incomes are good for a country because they pay large amounts of tax. This helps to improve the country, as regular taxes from billionaires go towards improving the environment and paying for government workers monthly salaries. The large amounts of money that are brought by certain individuals can help a country to boost its economic status and make improvements to the surrounding cities. For example, The Economist reported in 2017 that the taxes in New York paid by The Rothschild family helped to boost the cities economic status by 95%.
On the other hand, a government that can manage the earning of its people can also be beneficial. Controlled income would mean that people could earn a said amount before being taxed on most of their earnings. The tax thresholds would be set to control the amount of money that people could earn during one year, so that the economy could prosper, from those who earn over a certain amount. For instance, HMRC in the UK reported in 2016 that people who earn over one hundred thousand pounds per year will be taxed at a higher rate. This rate then grows by 10% for earnings over that amount.
In my opinion, I believe that the government should tax those who earn obscene amounts of money, as this could be used to better the status of a country and go towards improving the everyday facilities used by society. Any person who earns billions should have some of that money controlled by the government, so that it can be distributed to local communities, to improve schools, hospitals and pay council workers salaries. For example, in an article from the BBC news in 2017, large amounts of tax from high earning Google CEO’s was used to renovate and update hospitals in the city of London.
In conclusion, the CEO’s, billionaires, and the government should cooperate and work together in order to provide a better and brighter future for its nation.
(Word count – 418 / Band score 8)
- Task Achievement – The essay provides an answer to the question asked, supported by relevant examples.
- Coherence and Cohesion – The answer has been divided into clear logical paragraphs and each main body paragraph only has one main idea. There are cohesive links between the main body paragraphs.
- Lexical Resource – There is evidence of a wide range of vocabulary, with no errors in the text.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy – The answer has no grammatical errors. The sentences have a wide range of structures.
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