Writing Task 2 – Band Score 4.5

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Most of the students studying for the IELTS Test have said they find the IELTS Writing Tasks difficult. I have corrected hundreds of task 1 and 2 essays on various topics, giving estimated band scores and detailed feedback. There are also suggestions on how to improve for a higher band score. Take a look at this student essay example and see how it compares to your own writing.

Writing Task 2 Question

“Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.”

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IELTS task 2 essay with corrections
IELTS task 2 essay with corrections
IELTS task 2 essay with corrections
IELTS task 2 essay with corrections

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1 thought on “Writing Task 2 – Band Score 4.5”

  1. A number of issues are arising throughout the world However, obesity among childers is one of the biggest problem in our world This essay is an attempt to discuss about troubles alongwith plausible measure to tackle the problem.
    To commence with ,there are manifold reason of this notion. First and formost is In this contemprary era most of the juviles rather than teenagers consume more and more fast food instead of intake healthy food at home they eat only humburger ,chips , and soft bevarages.They do-not do exercise and yoga to remain fit .Moreover Obesity cause many disease like heart disease and cancer and many more asurvey conduct by world health organisation that in 2030 70% obesity burgeoning among offspring Futhermore most of the toodlers devote their time by using mobile phone rathee than playing sports activites In addition fast consist alot of unsaturated oil and chemical salt
    On the other hand, it is the duty of parents to give healthy diet to their children and restrict time on using mobile phone .and also encourage then to take regular exercise awareness campaign should be organised by the government to aware the student about unhealty food .government could raise tax on fast food .
    To recapitulate , though this issue is instrumountable yet, it needs to be curbed by taking appropraite measurement mesaurement which are afformentioned.

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