In this post, we will look at an advantage/disadvantage essay example from the IELTS writing task 2 test. Students often ask if the questions are repeated year after year and the answer is no, but the topics are. There are so many questions written each year, you may find your practise answering various questions on different topics. For example, you could write essays to answer questions about education or the environment, which benefits you because you learn vocabulary associated with those topics and develop ideas that can help you in your writing test.
Practising writing IELTS task 2 essays on a range of topics is a great way to learn new vocabulary for those topics, but also to practice your essay structures. You begin to develop your ideas around those topics, thinking of examples and giving your opinions.
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Take a look at the IELTS essay Writing Task 2 example on Environment below >>
Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
At the present time, many ocean animals are taken from their natural sea environment where they are placed in sea life centres/ocean parks for people’s enjoyment. I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Firstly this essay will discuss, the drawbacks of sea creatures being held in captivity. Secondly, it will also consider the main advantage in removing certain sea animals from their home to help survival rates.
On the one hand, it is very unfortunate if a creature is removed from its natural habitat, more so to its family as they are taken away and used for the purpose of entertainment. Many dolphins, sea lions and even orcas are being removed from their mothers at an early stage in order to train them so that they can learn tricks they will use during their performances. This can affect the lifespan of certain creatures since they are subjected to trauma and being confined in a small living area. For instance, a study conducted by WWF in 2016 reported that captive dolphins lived only for 10 years as opposed to, the age span of 20 years for dolphins who have lived in the ocean.
On the other hand, some sea creatures are being removed from their habitat for the purpose of scientific studies, as this allows scientists to help the population of the said animals to flourish by assisting them to procreate. They give them proper nutrition and aid them to combat certain diseases that affect their kind, in order to ensure species survival. For example, the Discovery Channel documented a study about the effectiveness of aiding the population of Dugong, an endangered creature in the Philippines by a local group of scientists. They helped to increase the survival rate of the creatures and released them into the wild.
In conclusion, although there are pros and cons in removing the sea creatures from their natural habitat and the drawbacks outweigh the benefits because even sea creatures need to be with their family and thrive in their natural environment.
(Word count – 321 / Band score 8)
ESSAY ANALYSIS :
- Task Achievement – The essay provides an answer to the question asked, supported by relevant examples.
- Coherence and Cohesion – The answer has been divided into clear logical paragraphs and each main body paragraph only has one main idea. There are cohesive links between the main body paragraphs.
- Lexical Resource – There is evidence of a wide range of vocabulary, with no errors in the text.
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy – The answer has no grammatical errors. The sentences have a wide range of structures.
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